Hello, my name is Rebecca In. I will introduce myself. I will tell some things that I like and I don't like. Also I will write about other things about me.
First, I will write about my favorite things. My favorite food is chocolate. I love chocolates. My favorite K-pop singer is Seongkyu Kim and L(His real name is Myeongsoo Kim). They are the members of 'INFINITE' (Infinite is a K-pop boy group.). My favorite number is 7 because Infinite has 7members and 7 is lucky number. My favorite alphabet is L becuase I love L. I enjoy wearing jeans and shirts. I have 3dogs. I love them. My favorite subject is math because I love to solve some math problems.
Now, I will write about what I don't like. I don't like pizza. It is too gross. I hate Kendo. I used to learn, but I gave up because it is too hard to learn.
My hobby is listening to music. I love all kinds of music. I like listening and dancing to music, but I don't like singing that much.
I will write many things about my favorite things or people. Also I will try to put some pictures on my blog. I hope I .can write many things about me. Thank you.
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Your are a good writer! It would have been better if you developed your ideas a bit more. Just change some minor mistakes and you're fine.
Thank you too for sharing about yourself. It's nice to meet you! :)